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Iamcool432
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Ok, I’ll be waiting for the scratch team respond, if they don’t can I try to resubmit it?you won't be punished if st can see that it's a mistake. As always, correct reports help the scratch team as they do not have the resources to monitor every corner of the site at once, although be sure that you are making correct reports because many false reports can result in punishment and false reports also waste the Scratch Team's time.
smartypantschlo
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I could, if you need me to! ^^ Do we have a theme-ish for the main cabin, or just general medieval fantasy?
General Medival Fantasy
UnknownUsername1214
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Consider removing the “:” at the end of the link, otherwise it wont work Hi Scratch Team,
https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34826172/: April fools!!
April fools is coming soon!!
Maybe give it a feature?
Thank you,
@Arya50
krm271krm271
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I could, if you need me to! ^^ Do we have a theme-ish for the main cabin, or just general medieval fantasy?
BABFT_Royal_Member
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Hey, you! wanna try Ping Pong?
It's very fun and, you can pick the difficulty!
very smooth effects!
In this game, I put a secret. try and find it!
It's very fun and, you can pick the difficulty!
very smooth effects!
In this game, I put a secret. try and find it!
say [The secret is #########!!]
arya50
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Hi Scratch Team,
https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34826172/: April fools!!
April fools is coming soon!!
Maybe give it a feature?
Thank you,
@Arya50
https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34826172/: April fools!!
April fools is coming soon!!
Maybe give it a feature?
Thank you,
@Arya50
arya50
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Hi Scratch Team,
https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34826172/: April fools!!
April fools is coming soon!!
Maybe give it a feature?
Thank you,
@Ary5
https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34826172/: April fools!!
April fools is coming soon!!
Maybe give it a feature?
Thank you,
@Ary5
subjectnamehere
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you won't be punished if st can see that it's a mistake. As always, correct reports help the scratch team as they do not have the resources to monitor every corner of the site at once, although be sure that you are making correct reports because many false reports can result in punishment and false reports also waste the Scratch Team's time.
CrazyCoder1247
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i accidentaly made a duplicate of this, so auto support.
invalidaccess
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working on a game and i want menu to look good
the menu has 4 options in the middle of the screen and you can slide them down or up using arrows
the thing is i only want hree of em to appear at the same time
as i slide , other options must appear and it loops back again
here : https://scratch.mit.edu/projects/889847976/
the menu has 4 options in the middle of the screen and you can slide them down or up using arrows
the thing is i only want hree of em to appear at the same time
as i slide , other options must appear and it loops back again
here : https://scratch.mit.edu/projects/889847976/
cute_stuff_
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Hello! I am creating a coach cat series! for more, click this link:
https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34914210/
https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34914210/
luna724
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hi sophia!
thank you so much that's perfect <3 and yes we've got this we can get it done!!
that's also a really good idea for the guides and travelers, we're totally keeping that :>
have fun at ballet class!
thank you so much that's perfect <3 and yes we've got this we can get it done!!
that's also a really good idea for the guides and travelers, we're totally keeping that :>
have fun at ballet class!
MatthewWaseem-
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this is how to make a clicker :
or
when this sprite clicked
change [ v] by (1)
wait (0.1) secs
or
when green flag clicked
forever
if <> then
<<> and <>>
<touching [mouse pointer> v] ?>
<mouse down?>
change [1 v] by (0)
wait (0.1) secs
Mar 29, 2024 21:24:30
which forums do dupes exist in? [resolved]
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cactus-cacti
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which forums have duplicate posts, like the post would get closed for being a dupe?
smartypantschlo
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Could someone make a Thumbnail for the Main Cabin?
Mar 29, 2024 21:17:53
Discuss parts you didn’t like in a movie you did like, or vice versa
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foundyoufaker
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I just watched Kung Fu Panda 4 and it is the most predictable movie I've ever seen, but it's still a fun ride.
among_us1w2
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Exactly.Being critical does follow the community guidelines as long as its respectful. As long as we don't attack you or anything related to you and only discuss the suggestion itself, its all ok.Being too critical doesn't follow the Community Guidelines, as a result of Scratchers being discouraged, let's not talk about one.if its rejected then they are gonna be so critical NOTE: Guys let's not make the replies too critical, I don't care if the idea is rejected.
isn't this implemented?
The whole point of the suggestions forums is to discuss about the the suggestions, if we don't be critical, then won't we possibly miss out on a flaw a suggestion might have?
For example, saying
“This suggestion is kinda dumb (insert reason here)”
Is okay, but
“You’re dumb”
Is not okay.
Because criticizing the suggestion isn’t the same as criticizing the suggestor
-ExoByte-
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Still a bit “chunky”, but it IS definitely a better improvement. Ty! put theif <(direction) = [90]> then
change x by (-20)
else
change x by (20)
end
in the repeat 10 block
but it still feels 'off' but it's better..
is this what you asked for?
was
medians
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There is already a random position option in the go to block. Why though?
You can just go to x: (random (-240)(240)) y: (random(-180)(180))
It could be like this:
set x to (random v)
set y to (random v)
Mar 29, 2024 21:11:36
Old 2.0 Blocks that Should Be Brought Back
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medians
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That is not why, it is mostly because the blocks were replaced (other than that, because the blocks were in removed extensions), and all at once was removed before 2.0 finished. If they had been taken out of Scratch 3.0, ST must of had a reason for it. A reason that probably looks a lot like these:
1. It has an easy workaround
2. It was virtually unused
3. it was too complicated
I hope that helped
Also, days since 2000, video blocks, switch backdrop to () and wait, next costume/backdrop, and other “virtually unused” or “easy workaround” blocks still exist.
Edit: Actually, there was also this block (which was hidden but was in a currently existing extension)
https://en.scratch-wiki.info/wiki/Play_Note_()_for_()_Seconds_(block)
And yeah, that was the real reason it was hidden.
BigNate469
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1. The OP isn't a new scratcher.(#4)New Scratchers can't post clickable links to websites outside Scratch. (Normal Scratchers can, however.)
Also, It's been forever since I have been on the forums, since when did they stop making GitHub links clickable? It's really annoying.
2. https://github.com/mikedev101/cloudlink-golang
(Click the link icon next to the image icon, in turn next to the text formatting)
Edit: I'm aware that this is a necropost, but considering that it was on the front page BEFORE I posted here…
foundyoufaker
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IDK why hasnt there been any activity for such a long time?
Mar 29, 2024 21:10:00
Did Scratch get rid of Studio Notifications???
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lgrov44
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Yes, but I figured it would be a duplicate, at most, it implies that he is missing all of his Studio Notifications and thus can be considered a duplicate. I do understand your point on the 2 being in different categories, but in this case, it may not even matter.I don't even get studio notifications anymore. My most recent one was two weeks ago. This has happened before, so it's most likely just a bug.I don't think so. For as long asI have had this account for, it has always been delayed by about 4 hours and I think I have heard that it would almost always be like that (don't rely on that last bit of information, I am not entirely sure). Also, I think this is a duplicate, though I would assume otherwise until I can find the page. it's just a bug. they're probably working to fix it.
EDIT 1: I think I found it.
Also, the original topic you found is in bugs and glitches. This one is in questions about scratch.
Mar 29, 2024 21:09:51
‧₊˚ Authors & Artists Unite™ ~ Committee Chat <3
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iinspirqtion
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Yep, that sounds good, but maybe also to make it a bit different from SWC's critiquaire, we could not only limit it to writing critiques, maybe also help with ideas and other writing-related things?I apologize as this is a bit late, but for the april event could we do a help center for writing? Maybe people could ask for critique, help with their story, ideas, etc.?
That might be cool. Maybe though it could be called a Writing Exchange Event? Ask for critique and critique someone else's? I just think that for people to actually participate and critique, it would need to be considered more of a trade. Otherwise, people might just drop off their story and go.
Mar 29, 2024 21:09:46
How do I know a song is not appropriate for Scratch?
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-stxllxr
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That's not what they mean. They mean would the song be appropriate for a 8-year-old to listen to as all projects should be appropriate for all ages (8 is used as the benchmark commonly). Could an 8-year-old listen to it? If no, then don't use it.
What about the 8-year-old who's deaf? Then I can't use anything.
fire_alchemist
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why hasnt there been any activity for such a long time?
among_us1w2
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also link the post where paddle2see says he doesn't here thisReport the projects that have tag spam or inaccurate tags, and the ST will address it by removing it or taking it down.
I just attempted to report a project and I got the response of “Thanks for the report! We checked it out and couldn’t find anything wrong with the content you reported. Please only report projects, comments, profiles, or studios that are mean or inappropriate. Check out the Community Guidelines (linked at the bottom of every page) for help deciding what is or isn't ok for Scratch.”
Did you click the Other category in the report reasons dropdowns and specify “this project spams tags?”
Iamcool432
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Hi, i just reported a huge number of content (around 150 projects, studios and profiles) which i believe break the terms of services, i sent them using the contact us form, will scratch even look at that? this took hours to find and i writed little notes on why the specific projects was inappropriate, it took a lot of time, was that a good thing or em i wasting everybodies time? dose this really help the scratch team in any, way shape of form?
petspez
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Report the projects that have tag spam or inaccurate tags, and the ST will address it by removing it or taking it down.
I just attempted to report a project and I got the response of “Thanks for the report! We checked it out and couldn’t find anything wrong with the content you reported. Please only report projects, comments, profiles, or studios that are mean or inappropriate. Check out the Community Guidelines (linked at the bottom of every page) for help deciding what is or isn't ok for Scratch.”
Did you click the Other category in the report reasons dropdowns and specify “this project spams tags?”
Mar 29, 2024 21:07:38
clone clones itself while main script clones
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invalidaccess
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you need to make a variable and name it “ID” set the ID variable to “clone” right before you create a clone and set it back to “sprite” after you done with cloning
also you can repeat this cycle as many times as you want by using “repeat (times) ” block
next, when the main script runs you have to add “if ID = sprite(or clone)” then create clone of myself
dont forget to initialize ID variable to sprite whern flag clicked
also you can repeat this cycle as many times as you want by using “repeat (times) ” block
next, when the main script runs you have to add “if ID = sprite(or clone)” then create clone of myself
dont forget to initialize ID variable to sprite whern flag clicked
DangerPuppy10
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There is a workaround for the Why though?
You can just go to x: (random (-240)(240)) y: (random(-180)(180))
go to [random position v]too. But, look at the workaround chart I have. (in signature.)
fraaker456
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My game all of a sudden broke and i m confused wyh its doing whast ist doing pls help me https://scratch.mit.edu/projects/963905027
_-Almond-_
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Smart! Would you like a shout-out on the April Fool's Day project?
-ThatOneGuitarist-
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Report the projects that have tag spam or inaccurate tags, and the ST will address it by removing it or taking it down.
I just attempted to report a project and I got the response of “Thanks for the report! We checked it out and couldn’t find anything wrong with the content you reported. Please only report projects, comments, profiles, or studios that are mean or inappropriate. Check out the Community Guidelines (linked at the bottom of every page) for help deciding what is or isn't ok for Scratch.”
CaceyIronbeard
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What I do is I have a sprite for each animation (If you are rlly good scratcher you can find out how to condense to 1 sprite.) I have a script in each that goes GREEN FLAG CLICKED FOREVER NEXT COSTUME WAIT(…)SECONDS
Citcat29
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https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34887765 This studio is all about easter! It includes many fun facts about easter, it has a professional description layout and has a good method. It's really fun! I think it should be featured for the upcoming holiday!
bobinny
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You’re okay, Scratch Team does keep track of alerts, but unless your mute reasons and text were severe, 10 minutes probably won’t cause you a ban. If you were banned, you would get a screen showing your last 6 alerts though.
Iamcool432
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Thanks, ill be reporting ALOT! that's why im asking 1. Reporting an inappropriate project is never a waste of time
2. I don't think that there is a limit, but it is possible. If there is one, however, it's probably pretty high, preventing you from pasting something like an entire book in a report to prevent report spam (probably the most ironic type of spam, but unfortunately still a problem). If there isn't a limit like that, then there is eventually a hardware limit of whatever computer you are running scratch on.
Mar 29, 2024 21:01:59
how to detect if a list has a bigger value in it in scratch
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CaceyIronbeard
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how do you detect that though? like say number one in the list = 45 and number 42 = 63. how do you make it realise that there is a number in the list bigger than the first value?
dreamysolitude
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hi luna! i just made updates to the description, and since i have to go to ballet class soon (and i won't be active until i get back at 7), i'll give you back hostship so you can make any changes you want <3
also, maybe a good name for us are “the guides” and the campers can be “ the travelers”? i'll put down a placeholder name for now
also, maybe a good name for us are “the guides” and the campers can be “ the travelers”? i'll put down a placeholder name for now
bobinny
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If it’s only a selected amount of emojis, then the project should be fine.
Mar 29, 2024 21:00:42
Geometry (Spooky) Dash Custom Level Codes
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oopsied
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I remade the level to have insane straightfly and narrow corridors and i can say its top 1!!!ip address (top 5000 platformer extrem demooon, for dalis spookyhac)Cool level I wanna be the153_25_1_1_1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1h5a4a5a1a50a1b2a1a2a1a2c1a2a1a2a1b2a1b21a16z20a1o4c1ʏ1o2b1b2a3b1a2a3a1c2a1b15a17z13a1ⓛ28b1ᴀ1m50a1a2c1a2a1c2b1c2a1b18a14z19a1ⓙ2a1c2a1j2b1b2c1a2a1a2a1a2c1f2b1c3b1b3a1a3a1j1o2a3a2a1a2c1a2a1a2a1a3a2a3a1g4a1t50a1ⓙ2a1a2c1k2a1b2a1a2a1a2a3a1b2a3b1f2a1a2a1b2a1b2a1a2a1a2a1a2a1a2a1a2a1c1b2c1a2c1b2a1ᴘ2a1b2a1a2a1a2a1a5a2a1c3a1a2a3b1c2a1a2a1d3a2a3a1a2a3a2a1a2a1a2a1a2a3b1f2b1b3a2a3a1a2a1a2a1a2a1i1b2a1a2a1a2a1d2a1t2c1a2c1a2a1c2b1b2a1a2c1a2a3a1y2a1b2a3a2a1a2a1a2b1k2a3a2a1y2a1a2a1b2a1b2a1c2a1i1b2a1c2c1b2a1t2a1a2a1a2a1a2a1a2a3b1b2a1b2a1a2a3b1a2a1a2a1w3a2a3a1a2a1a2a1a3a1a2a3a1k2a1a2a1y2b1t1b2c1a2a3b1a3a2a3a1s2a1a2a1a2a1a2a1a2a1a2a1a2b1b2a1a2a1c2a1a2a1ⓣ2c1ⓤ1ⓕ2c1a2c1a2c1a2a3a1b3a1a2c1a2b1あ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓕ4a1す1ⓕ4a1す1ⓕ4a1す1ⓕ4a1す1ⓕ4a1/4a1ᴜ4a1す1ⓕ4a1す1ⓕ4a1す1ⓕ4a153_25_1_1_0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ153_25_1_1_0す0ⓖ0ja0す0v0gd0ea0す0p0hb0ⓦa0せ0pa0gb0ⓘc0ac0ac0ⓧb0ha0le0c0ya0ⓘg0aa0ta0ⓔb0od0j0ʜa0bd0aa0ha0ⓞa0ab0cc0w0ca0ⓔa0ya0bd0aa0ha0ⓠa0dc0w0ia0ya0ⓒa0ʜb0x0ma0ua0ob0ᴠa0aa0w0す0gb0x0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ0す0ⓖ153_25_1_1_1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1ʜ2c1a2c1a2c1<1ʜ2a1c2a1a2a1a2a1;1ʜ2a1c2a1a2a1a2a1;1ʜ2a1c2a3a2a1a2a1;1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ1す1ⓖ|
edit : wow you made the platformer 153 blocks long
(yes the codes short its kinda repetitive and basically a layout lol)
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DangerPuppy10
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This will be a new dropdown for the
It will look like this:
And it makes the sprite go to a random x, or y.
Yes, I understand there is a workaround. I also understand the workaround is slightly easy. But the block makes it easier. Look at my chart in my signature (do not use it against me) this block will have a lot of usage. This also makes it a tiny tiny bit easier for newer scratchers who do not think of the workaround straight away.
Make a block using a 2 block workaround and backpack it? Or, easily have the ability to take it out of the editor as a real
block instead?
go to [ v]block.
It will look like this:
go to [random x v]
go to [random y v]
And it makes the sprite go to a random x, or y.
Yes, I understand there is a workaround. I also understand the workaround is slightly easy. But the block makes it easier. Look at my chart in my signature (do not use it against me) this block will have a lot of usage. This also makes it a tiny tiny bit easier for newer scratchers who do not think of the workaround straight away.
Would you rather:
Make a block using a 2 block workaround and backpack it? Or, easily have the ability to take it out of the editor as a real
block instead?
-forevermore
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critique for summer
(read the original here: https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/post/7874133/ )
opening thoughts: hi summer! first off, i love this concept and i think it's an awesome idea
i can't even begin to explain what a good opener this is, it perfectly captures the tension that must be pervading the room.
I feel that maybe a new line after “tears” would be good here.
I really like the nonchalance of some of the characters, like Devon in comparison to his mom, he's acting like he doesn't care but the contrast with his mother is really effective.
The word heaving adds a lot to this line, showing instead of telling gives more depth to your story which you do well throughout.
The casual mention of Ellen's past and perhaps why she is almost bitter is too good. However, I feel like you could omit the “with fury” after the word hot. Ellen's words and face already imply this.
Aaahh it's the realism of how their family has been distant but the dynamics aren't fixed (yet) although the world is ending. This is such a nice line.
I have no words. This is great.
I think you could do a new line for each of these sentences. Currently, there's a feeling of mundaneness, which I think you intended, but I personally feel that some tension could also be built up with a slight tweak in the formatting in addition to this. Also, silence settling like a fog carries on the ongoing imagery of fire/smoke which is super cool
The way you portray everything leading up to the “last meal” part, is really nice. I like how despite people acting nonchalant, like they don't care and in a matter-of-a fact way, that the silence is universal.
Half hearted needs a dash here
This is incredibly touching.
I love how everyone sort of falls into their natural family roles and how you portray that to the reader. This can be applied to a much wider context, which is super cool.
You wrote this line very tenderly. It sets up a lovely atmosphere of nostalgia.
I like how this is a reminder to the reader amidst the normalcy that the family is experiencing, that the world is ending. To symbolise this even better, a new line here would be effective, since this is quite an abrupt turn in an otherwise calm scene. I also feel that these two sentences are a little choppy. Maybe some extra description or imagery would be good?
The description here is stunning. One of my favourite parts of this entire piece, because it's so poetic and reminds me of, for some reason, old mythology.
However, instead of using the word sad, you could say something like “bittersweet” or “melancholic”. To me, sad doesn't encapsulate the emotions the family is probably feeling.
This memory is so sweet, and that line about summer said millions in six words. Although I think you could rephrase the beginning sentence to “The wistfulness of Ellen's voice…” I'm not sure how to justify this, but I think the sentence would flow better. The repetition here of laughs could be replaced by “Ellen does too.”
Go ahead, break my heart into pieces again-
The tension here is golden. The backstory you give in seemingly simple sentences adds a world of depth to the story.
You could add some pauses in the story. Maybe an asterisk to symbolise a new scene/event/ short time break. This piece is well-paced, but a little fast/clustered at times because it feels as if a lot if happening at once without any story pauses <3
The inner monologues of each of the siblings are so good. You've chosen some select things and incorporated them here to explain why they are the way they are, like you did with Ellen earlier. The backstories are amazing.
I don't know why but I love this sentence.
THIS ENDING. AAAAHHH. I can't even begin to express how much I adore how they all left holding hands/holding each other.
Final thoughts: This is such a touching story. Seeing a broken family live out their last moments together broke my heart. I think that at times you could slow down the pacing of the story, add a little description and add some pauses. It's a very good piece to enter for the writing comp, this snapshot has a lot of depth to it which I could keenly feel as I read the story. Some of the lines here are beautiful. Overall, I think this is a lovely piece. I wish you the best of luck for the comp, thank you for letting me read this. <3
+760 words
(read the original here: https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/post/7874133/ )
opening thoughts: hi summer! first off, i love this concept and i think it's an awesome idea
Mom’s stupid egg timer fills the awkward silence at the dinner table.
Tick. Tick. Tick.
Finally, Ellen scoffs. “Turn that thing off! We don’t need a countdown to our doom.”
i can't even begin to explain what a good opener this is, it perfectly captures the tension that must be pervading the room.
Mom stammers, her eyes red with tears. “Oh- I… well, I just thought… sorry.”
I feel that maybe a new line after “tears” would be good here.
“Since when have I been your young man?” Devon asks, speaking with that drawl that had always annoyed his mother. “And why do you care? The whole world’ll go up in smoke in…” he glances at the egg timer, “two hours and twenty-five minutes.” That was too much for Mom. She bursts into tears again.
I really like the nonchalance of some of the characters, like Devon in comparison to his mom, he's acting like he doesn't care but the contrast with his mother is really effective.
She puts a hand on her mother’s heaving shoulder.
The word heaving adds a lot to this line, showing instead of telling gives more depth to your story which you do well throughout.
“At least I care. You should be thankful the government even let you come, anyway. So tell me, how was life in prison? Make any new friends?”
Ellen’s face grows red hot with fury. “You little…”
The casual mention of Ellen's past and perhaps why she is almost bitter is too good. However, I feel like you could omit the “with fury” after the word hot. Ellen's words and face already imply this.
It’s been years since they all sat in this room together, and they can’t even hold a conversation.
Aaahh it's the realism of how their family has been distant but the dynamics aren't fixed (yet) although the world is ending. This is such a nice line.
“You all wait here.”
As she walks off, Devon mumbles, “what else are we supposed to do?”
I have no words. This is great.
Silence settles like a fog once again. Ellen sits uncomfortably, biting a fingernail. Devon stares blankly at the wall. Riley pulls out her phone, and turns on the latest news bulletin. The announcer’s matter-of-fact voice offers little comfort.
I think you could do a new line for each of these sentences. Currently, there's a feeling of mundaneness, which I think you intended, but I personally feel that some tension could also be built up with a slight tweak in the formatting in addition to this. Also, silence settling like a fog carries on the ongoing imagery of fire/smoke which is super cool
They eat silently, each one lost in their own thoughts. Bites are taken slowly. No one is eager to finish their last meal.
The way you portray everything leading up to the “last meal” part, is really nice. I like how despite people acting nonchalant, like they don't care and in a matter-of-a fact way, that the silence is universal.
Ellen mumbles, “I always hated monopoly,” but her comment is halfhearted.
Half hearted needs a dash here
It’s been a long time, but no one will ever forget their piece.
This is incredibly touching.
Although they don’t always get along with him, at least they know they can trust him.
I love how everyone sort of falls into their natural family roles and how you portray that to the reader. This can be applied to a much wider context, which is super cool.
However, there is a tenderness to the quiet. The clinking of the worn pieces brings back memories of days gone by.
You wrote this line very tenderly. It sets up a lovely atmosphere of nostalgia.
Suddenly, there’s a flicker, and everything goes black. Someone screams.
I like how this is a reminder to the reader amidst the normalcy that the family is experiencing, that the world is ending. To symbolise this even better, a new line here would be effective, since this is quite an abrupt turn in an otherwise calm scene. I also feel that these two sentences are a little choppy. Maybe some extra description or imagery would be good?
The blood-red sun is setting, and the room is tinged crimson in its glow. Everyone stares in sad fascination at the color. It would be beautiful if it wasn’t heralding extinction.
The description here is stunning. One of my favourite parts of this entire piece, because it's so poetic and reminds me of, for some reason, old mythology.
However, instead of using the word sad, you could say something like “bittersweet” or “melancholic”. To me, sad doesn't encapsulate the emotions the family is probably feeling.
Ellen’s voice is wistful. “Remember the time we went to Atlantic City Boardwalk?”
“And you got sick eating saltwater taffy? Yeah, I remember.” Riley laughs, and Ellen laughs with her.
“That was a great summer.”
“Yeah.”
This memory is so sweet, and that line about summer said millions in six words. Although I think you could rephrase the beginning sentence to “The wistfulness of Ellen's voice…” I'm not sure how to justify this, but I think the sentence would flow better. The repetition here of laughs could be replaced by “Ellen does too.”
Her friends invited her to come to New York with them, but her father insisted that summer was a time for family. She didn’t see why there was any reason she needed more time with them. She tried to get as little as she could. Now she craves more, but there’s nothing she can do about it.
Go ahead, break my heart into pieces again-
“I know where the candles are. This is my house too.”
The words hang in the air. After five years, is it really?
The tension here is golden. The backstory you give in seemingly simple sentences adds a world of depth to the story.
Ellen returns a minute later with Mom’s nicest scented candle in her hands. Mom bites her lip.
…
Devon fetches the lighter, and once the candle is lit the room fills with a calming scent.
You could add some pauses in the story. Maybe an asterisk to symbolise a new scene/event/ short time break. This piece is well-paced, but a little fast/clustered at times because it feels as if a lot if happening at once without any story pauses <3
Devon scoffs. “Come on! I was about to snag the set!”
Sirens sound in the distance.
I’m messed up. But I don’t want to die.
…
All her life she’s done her best to be perfect. One good child to make up for the wrongs of her siblings. Her parents had suffered enough. She needed to be the rock even when nothing else was firm.
The inner monologues of each of the siblings are so good. You've chosen some select things and incorporated them here to explain why they are the way they are, like you did with Ellen earlier. The backstories are amazing.
“Keep going, honey. I’m proud of you.”
I don't know why but I love this sentence.
The alarms grow louder and more incessant.
And then they’re gone.
THIS ENDING. AAAAHHH. I can't even begin to express how much I adore how they all left holding hands/holding each other.
Final thoughts: This is such a touching story. Seeing a broken family live out their last moments together broke my heart. I think that at times you could slow down the pacing of the story, add a little description and add some pauses. It's a very good piece to enter for the writing comp, this snapshot has a lot of depth to it which I could keenly feel as I read the story. Some of the lines here are beautiful. Overall, I think this is a lovely piece. I wish you the best of luck for the comp, thank you for letting me read this. <3
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I got that but then I missed it. Make it hard but don't make it based on chance, that's just dumbI know right! The Floor Is Lava's quest is absurd. I'm not waiting 8 rounds for a thing that I don't even have the guaranteed chance to get.True, like what the hell is Lifetopia? im not doing the hunt because i already got the fabrege from a couple years ago and 90% of the games in this hunt are actually garbage
Some of the challenges are so unclear. I spent like an hour trying to find the hunt in Slap battles and I didn't find it. I wanna get as much of it done though which just gives me a love hate relationship with it
Mar 29, 2024 20:54:57
Old 2.0 Blocks that Should Be Brought Back
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If they had been taken out of Scratch 3.0, ST must of had a reason for it. A reason that probably looks a lot like these:
1. It has an easy workaround
2. It was virtually unused
3. it was too complicated
I hope that helped
1. It has an easy workaround
2. It was virtually unused
3. it was too complicated
I hope that helped
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i aslo made a remix with mobile controlsThat could work, thank you so much for the help @BigNate469 , I will see and try that. Thanks again! You could try adding a “mobile mode” that adds a collapsable menu on the side to select settings, and place blocks if someone double-taps.
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