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SubscribeToZadpi
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exact same colors that are next to the current pixel. The reason why it's leaving dots is because those dots don't exactly match the color of the other pixels. You'll have to use the brush tool to fill those in yourself.The paint bucket works by filling in the
Color tolerance in Scratch would be useful, but unfortunately, the dev team hasn't added that. =[
Yes, but even if I make a single color square or circle, it still happens.
bluepig600
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I have a raspberry pi 5, a raspberry pi 4b, a raspberry pi 400 and two raspberry pi zero was. So far I've just been using them as servers for python code for cloud projects on scratch.(The servers are all down because one of my SD cards got corrupted and I haven't rewrote the code again)I use the raspberry pi 5 as my regular computer because I don't have a laptop or anything like that.
KittyCatKayden
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there was a thingy that let you download older versions of projects with files compatible with older versions of scratch, but for some reason, it's no longer allowed, why isn't it? (Since august 2023)
Mar 29, 2024 06:48:44
Scratch Wiki Community Portal - in the forums!
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lilacsonbaby
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We've been dealing with some server issues. I'm looking into it. I keep getting this error: 503 Service Unavailable
The service you requested is temporarily unavailable. Please try again in a few minutes.
If this continues, please let us know in the Wiki forum topic.
(Request URI: /w/index.php?title=Scratch_Wiki_talk:Community_Portal&action=submit)
mabey in this year it will work
-ExoByte-
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So, often, I'll go to Griffpatch's profile, hang out and chat and all that. Sometimes I'll get my chat disabled for mistakenly saying something that didn't follow the guidelines. However, I've noticed, each time or so, the time for my chat being disabled goes higher and higher, which was weird (and concerning), because usually I'll only get these every couple weeks or so, “shouldn't it reset if I didn't constantly disobey?” I thought. Eventually, it went up to 10 minutes. I've been starting to get more and more concerned, because I believe I heard something that if it the time amount gets high enough, eventually my account will get banned. And I don't want that, but how can I stop it if the time amount will never reset? Will my destiny just be a demise of getting banned?
Mar 29, 2024 06:22:31
Advanced Alpha Games Studio (Hiring artists, game designers, and more!)
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sieugach
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wait wait, what type of game we are making?Not sure lol. Maybe some cloud game?
Edit: Random but I just realized you are also looking for a UI designer. Idk if I can but I could do part gameplay and part UI designer considering I'm pretty good with vector art and general aesthetics.
Alright, I have added you to be a UI designer, too.
-RobinJasmine-
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This section has main mod characters: Unofficial Daily Sub-Topic for the Main Topic of the Day #18:
Your D&B OCs (if you have any) have been transported to a white room. In the centre of the room, there is a giant cake that's decorated with strawberries and vanilla icing. What will your OCs do? (If you would like, you can also include characters from the main mod and its mods.)
Dave would be confused but he'd try the cake
Bambi would ask, “Where's the corn?”
Tristan would squeal at that cake and gobble it up
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My own OCs
Shila would be confused, like Dave, but she'd eat the cake
Lila would just eat the strawberries.
Rachael would get suspicious while Tristan is eating the cake. Adilet keeps his guard up in case of any danger or threat
Horsekatto
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Bill just possessed another demon from a different show somehow.
CaptainVictoria
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octopuswinslow
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WOW!!!!!! by Camellia, and is a nong (for now, hope he puts it on gd) so replace it with 696969. I need to know how many people are joining so I can split parts. I'd like to have a bunch of gameplay creators and a few decorators. I cannot decorate, so sorry Difficulty is supposed to be easy demon (tier 2 for you gddl nuts), and there is no verifier yet.maybe i culd decrootate and yabe make some gameplay Thought I'd post this again. I'm hosting a collab! The song is
WallydogChoppychop
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Please give constructive feedback. Support for reasons listed in OP.
I support, I also think some of the block categories should be renamed as they are a bit confusing and not user/beginner-friendly
Mar 29, 2024 05:33:25
Why has there been 0 communication from the ST if AFD is on this year
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9cjames1
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Well considering how they've allowed it in the past… I don't think people are gonna realize..No it doesn't. No answer means it's not allowed. April Fools' Day is something that they have tolerated in the past, but it's still a violation of the rules if they don't explicitly allow it, even if they can't or don't enforce it. No answer means that we do it pre-April-Fools-subforum style.
30Buntinthomaz
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My browser / operating system: ChromeOS 14541.0.0, Chrome 122.0.0.0, No Flash version detected
there is a new thing called scratchwars is there any way you can stop it
there is a new thing called scratchwars is there any way you can stop it
Guy7304
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Very realistic, 10/10. (Sounds like a cool ideaCool! What's it about? I have an animation series called “Touching Grass” https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34453916How ya doin'?HelloHi
Hi
Hello
Good, im making an animationCool! What's it about? I have an animation series called “Touching Grass” https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34453916How ya doin'?HelloHi
Hi
Hello
Good, im making an animation
Its about scratch cat dropping a nokia and destroying the world
lchapa
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Cool! What's it about? I have an animation series called “Touching Grass” https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34453916How ya doin'?HelloHi
Hi
Hello
Good, im making an animation
Cool! What's it about? I have an animation series called “Touching Grass” https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34453916How ya doin'?HelloHi
Hi
Hello
Good, im making an animation
Its about scratch cat dropping a nokia and destroying the world
dreamysolitude
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good idea with the silhouettes xD
a lot of things to get done in a couple of days, but we got this, we're a power team >: ) i was actually planning on going to bed right now asdfdlk but i have an early dismissal tomorrow (noon) so i can get to work on the description when i get home but from 3:45 to 6:45 tomorrow i have ballet class, so i won't be active then <3
P.S. so i just made the thumbnail a bit clearer, hopefully it worked on your end <3
a lot of things to get done in a couple of days, but we got this, we're a power team >: ) i was actually planning on going to bed right now asdfdlk but i have an early dismissal tomorrow (noon) so i can get to work on the description when i get home but from 3:45 to 6:45 tomorrow i have ballet class, so i won't be active then <3
P.S. so i just made the thumbnail a bit clearer, hopefully it worked on your end <3
WallydogChoppychop
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Support.
But I think it should be a setting that it always auto shows scripts. As i haven't had much of a problem with them
But I think it should be a setting that it always auto shows scripts. As i haven't had much of a problem with them
luna724
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okay i just made you the host anyway if you can't do anything that's fine, but if you're going to be more active than me today/tomorrow it would be helpful to get a start on that. thank you so much <33
luna724
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Yeah we can alternate drawing! I'm really really really bad at drawing animals just so you have a heads up? Maybe we can find like silouhettes of the animals and design pfps lol :'D
yes i totally agree!! <33
and then i saw what fin said about notifications to campers- i'm going to be heading to bed soon, but I'll be more active tomorrow afternoon ish like 5pm? I think if you're active then we can solidify a storyline and start notifying campers. and make pcgs oh my goodness xD
but if you're going to be awake for much longer, can i make you the studio host so you can start typing up a desc? It might speed things up a little more. I would stay up but my parents are telling me and my siblings to get sleep </3
yes i totally agree!! <33
and then i saw what fin said about notifications to campers- i'm going to be heading to bed soon, but I'll be more active tomorrow afternoon ish like 5pm? I think if you're active then we can solidify a storyline and start notifying campers. and make pcgs oh my goodness xD
but if you're going to be awake for much longer, can i make you the studio host so you can start typing up a desc? It might speed things up a little more. I would stay up but my parents are telling me and my siblings to get sleep </3
Mar 29, 2024 05:10:03
⸙ The Fir Tree Federation ⸙ Reviews, Shops And Image Hosting! ⸙ Open, Hiring Staff ⸙
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StarryDove
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› Shop Name ‹ ♡ miss dove's café ♡
› Shop Link ‹ https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/741122/
› Banner Link ‹ https://u.cubeupload.com/Rshthtrht/missdovescafe.png
› Number Of Views On Shop ‹ 360 ig
› Why Do You Want To Join The Fir Tree Federation? ‹ recognition y'know
› Do You Want Reviews?‹ not eligible yet ig
› Does Your Shop Follow The Following Guidelines? ‹ i suppose so
› Guidelines For Joining ‹
› The Shop Must Include -
Is Part Of The Fir Tree Federation
Along With A Link To This Topic In The First or Secont Posts- will do
› The Shop Has To Follow The CGs And ToU ‹ ok
How You Want It To Be Displayed -
› Shop Link ‹ https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/741122/
› Banner Link ‹ https://u.cubeupload.com/Rshthtrht/missdovescafe.png
› Number Of Views On Shop ‹ 360 ig
› Why Do You Want To Join The Fir Tree Federation? ‹ recognition y'know
› Do You Want Reviews?‹ not eligible yet ig
› Does Your Shop Follow The Following Guidelines? ‹ i suppose so
› Guidelines For Joining ‹
› The Shop Must Include -
Is Part Of The Fir Tree Federation
Along With A Link To This Topic In The First or Secont Posts- will do
› The Shop Has To Follow The CGs And ToU ‹ ok
How You Want It To Be Displayed -
[center][url=https://scratch.mit.edu/discuss/topic/741122/][img]https://u.cubeupload.com/Rshthtrht/missdovescafe.png[/img][/url]
[big]❰❀[img=https://u.cubeupload.com/fmji/1f98b.png]✿ . ✦ [color=hotpink][b]♡ miss dove's café ♡[/color][/b][/big]
dreamysolitude
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awesome <3 we can also take turns doing them if you're fine with that ^^ (i'm so bad at drawing animals asdfjkl) yeah we can start with that! if you're drawing them also, feel free to just do whatever works for you lol <3
greatt, in that case we would only have 12-15 animals and i think we could do a pretty good job coming up with them haha! yes i was thinking of this as well! and yeah i don't think we could think of thirty individual fables :'D I totally agree with you here!
AHH YOU'RE SO AWESOME LUNA <333 this is so exciting to see everything come together, and i think fables is definitely bringing the spotlight to hufflepuff and giving them the attention they deserve, since they are pretty underrated lol <33
essayist
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hello everyone! the camper list is out, https://scratch.mit.edu/projects/991442237! kindly invite your campers before the session begins! if there's any confusion or error, don't hesitate to drop a message on a host's profile.
while we do realise that this session had a late kickstart, we hope your cabins are building on well. please ensure that your cabin has a thumbnail, storyline and studio before the month begins. thank you, and good luck! here's to an incredible session <3
while we do realise that this session had a late kickstart, we hope your cabins are building on well. please ensure that your cabin has a thumbnail, storyline and studio before the month begins. thank you, and good luck! here's to an incredible session <3
Vaibhs11
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This is a wikipedia article on different formulae that can be used to approximate pi. Here is a list of just the formulas (ignore the integrals part). You can implement any of these into scratch, although the more efficient ones take more computing power or are prone to floating point errors, and the less efficient ones just take more time to get there.
Floating point numbers aren't precise enough for any of these formulas. So, I recommend you store the numbers as a string and make your own digit-by-digit addition, subtraction, long multiplication and long division functions for strings. Using strings can hold way more numbers than floating point can I think.
Floating point numbers aren't precise enough for any of these formulas. So, I recommend you store the numbers as a string and make your own digit-by-digit addition, subtraction, long multiplication and long division functions for strings. Using strings can hold way more numbers than floating point can I think.
Mar 29, 2024 04:59:13
Why has there been 0 communication from the ST if AFD is on this year
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7salad3salad
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They probably either haven't decided or aren't doing it. Paddle might respond if you ask him, though.
No it doesn't. No answer means it's not allowed. April Fools' Day is something that they have tolerated in the past, but it's still a violation of the rules if they don't explicitly allow it, even if they can't or don't enforce it.I think they were joking
Mar 29, 2024 04:55:12
EASTER STUDIO (Can it be featured?) MUST SEE
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cookieowl10
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Hello wonderful people! I have just posted a new Easter studio! Consider proposing or featuring it! Whoever proposes gets a shout out! TYSM I love you all!! <3 https://scratch.mit.edu/studios/34865850
luna724
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yessss everything is coming together and i'm so excited for everyone to see it!!
- i think the starting few animals should be more common or well-known ones (like the hare and the tortoise), and probably after that animals that are more complicated to draw heheh
yeah we can start with that! if you're drawing them also, feel free to just do whatever works for you lol <3
- do you think changing animals every day would be too much work? i'm also not sure if we would be able to think up like 30 animals. in addition, the campers may not get the chance to notice every one of them. maybe each 2 or 3 days it's changed, would that work better?
yes i was thinking of this as well! and yeah i don't think we could think of thirty individual fables :'D I totally agree with you here!
- do you think it would be cool to have a project that's a drawing of a map (like a diagram of boxes with lines connecting them to one another) and every time we unlock an animal, the boxes fills up day by day (it would be an empty rectangle and then we would add the picture of the animal in there). so like “day 1, ‘hare’ (insert picture of hare clipart)” then the final box will be a picture of the destination, once we reach the end of camp? so we would basically be unlocking levels as the session goes by. sorry if none of this makes sense, just throwing ideas out there xD
that sounds so cool :00 definitely should do that, the campers will be interested in that i think and it could be motivational to unlock each animal as well!
by the way, my activity levels will drop the first few days of april because i'll be on vacation </3 so i won't be able to update the description then
that's completely fine! I hope you have tons of fun on your vacation <33 you have so many cool ideas sophia you're literally so awesome :star_struck:
dreamysolitude
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yessss everything is coming together and i'm so excited for everyone to see it!!
- i think the starting few animals should be more common or well-known ones (like the hare and the tortoise), and probably after that animals that are more complicated to draw heheh
- do you think changing animals every day would be too much work? i'm also not sure if we would be able to think up like 30 animals. in addition, the campers may not get the chance to notice every one of them. maybe each 2 or 3 days it's changed, would that work better?
- do you think it would be cool to have a project that's a drawing of a map (like a diagram of boxes with lines connecting them to one another) and every time we unlock an animal, the boxes fills up day by day (it would be an empty rectangle and then we would add the picture of the animal in there). so like “day 1, ‘hare’ (insert picture of hare clipart)” then the final box will be a picture of the destination, once we reach the end of camp? so we would basically be unlocking levels as the session goes by. sorry if none of this makes sense, just throwing ideas out there xD
by the way, my activity levels will drop the first few days of april because i'll be on vacation </3 so i won't be able to update the description then
- i think the starting few animals should be more common or well-known ones (like the hare and the tortoise), and probably after that animals that are more complicated to draw heheh
- do you think changing animals every day would be too much work? i'm also not sure if we would be able to think up like 30 animals. in addition, the campers may not get the chance to notice every one of them. maybe each 2 or 3 days it's changed, would that work better?
- do you think it would be cool to have a project that's a drawing of a map (like a diagram of boxes with lines connecting them to one another) and every time we unlock an animal, the boxes fills up day by day (it would be an empty rectangle and then we would add the picture of the animal in there). so like “day 1, ‘hare’ (insert picture of hare clipart)” then the final box will be a picture of the destination, once we reach the end of camp? so we would basically be unlocking levels as the session goes by. sorry if none of this makes sense, just throwing ideas out there xD
by the way, my activity levels will drop the first few days of april because i'll be on vacation </3 so i won't be able to update the description then
Xzillox
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it's just a political view. just don't show support for bad communist dictators from history.
Mar 29, 2024 04:43:33
Did Scratch get rid of Studio Notifications???
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Xzillox
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it's just a bug. they're probably working to fix it.
Mar 29, 2024 04:34:33
Official [scratchblocks] Testing Topic 9
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AzfarPogko
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BRUHMy browser / operating system: Windows NT 10.0, Chrome 123.0.0.0, No Flash version detected
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lchapa
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thats actually a good project idea as you can't really be limited on the length of cloud variablesYep, those are fine. Are emojis allowed?
So now i have another idea, in the project there will be diferent opinions like “Is pineapple on pizza gross?” and then the user replies with emojis:
Totally agree
agree
neutro
disagree
Totally disagree
The users cant post new opinions but can suggest in the comments
I know
luna724
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bahaha i've never had so much fun designing a cabin before <33 everything's fitting together so perfectly, this is going to be so great!!
luna724
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So, I remember what we were thinking earlier was like an animal each day and then they like have a lesson for you? And we could probably put a short little fable in the desc/comments each day (although it's hard to say if i'd be able to add to the desc, so for that i might make you studio host)
I just read your canva comment, yes that's pretty much what we've discussed so far! Yeah, we could have an animal each day and then we could have scrolls as the currency. Then we could have a certain amount like you said, to get to the destination. And then maybe they could get pfps and/or banners with scrolls, and each day a new animal that we use in the fable could be unlocked to have in the pfps! we could probably have a good starting few.
I just read your canva comment, yes that's pretty much what we've discussed so far! Yeah, we could have an animal each day and then we could have scrolls as the currency. Then we could have a certain amount like you said, to get to the destination. And then maybe they could get pfps and/or banners with scrolls, and each day a new animal that we use in the fable could be unlocked to have in the pfps! we could probably have a good starting few.
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thats actually a good project idea as you can't really be limited on the length of cloud variablesYep, those are fine. Are emojis allowed?
So now i have another idea, in the project there will be diferent opinions like “Is pineapple on pizza gross?” and then the user replies with emojis:
Totally agree
agree
neutro
disagree
Totally disagree
The users cant post new opinions but can suggest in the comments
lchapa
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Not really. The way the external scripts work doesn't use any of your code to update the cloud variables. It can directly change them. All they need to know is the encoding.
That's the reason, with unreadable code they will struggle trying to understand the code, and i can add a code that detects if it clicked “See code” or “remix” and then activate this
when I start as a clone
create clone of [myself v]
delete this clone
It will only activate if the username is not lchapa. Also if i put each define block in front of the most important parts and cover it it will make it even harder to read, nearly imposible, considering my project have 500+ blocks at this moment and i make a new block for every one of them and i use them once it will triplicate the amount of blocks
Mar 29, 2024 04:23:03
Official [scratchblocks] Testing Topic 9
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AzfarPogko
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Mar 29, 2024 04:14:40
♫♫ The Piano Shop ♫♫ Quality music services since 25 May 2022 ♫♫ Offering all kinds of music! ♫♫
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kooqle
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Hi!
I am a musician with relative and unproven perfect pitch.
Where do you make your music on? e.g. garageband, musescore.
I would love to know!
I am a musician with relative and unproven perfect pitch.
Where do you make your music on? e.g. garageband, musescore.
I would love to know!
Mar 29, 2024 04:12:17
Can I mention my support for Palestine in my signature?
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colorjuice
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If you aren’t saying it in a way that threatens anyone its fine i think
Mar 29, 2024 04:08:40
Pokémon Card Duels - post here to find online match
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I am ready for a battle
Axeldeveloper
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I have been trying to make a chat room using a list and some cloud variables but nothing seems to be working. HELP MEEE!!!!
Mar 29, 2024 04:03:51
Official [scratchblocks] Testing Topic 9
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coins where the first currencyThey arentcoins are better btwwait lets make it longerSecond longest quote chain on this topic so far (18 participants, longest 19)Right, coins came in the 7th century BCcoin came before dollars i thinkIt’s not what you care, it is what it isbut stillYes I know that the same currency but not the same resource$1=100cActually, bitcoins are better than coins, they are more expensive, they are golden coins, and they are shinyyeah and the name of the currency “bitcoin”money isnt digital i can hold money in my handNo, because a coin isn't digital paper like money, a coin is harder than a dollar, and you'd still use a dollar as a coina dollar wouldn't exist if coins didn't existWHAT DO YOU NEED TO FLIP THE COIN FOR!!??!?!you cant flip a chunk of gold thoughNo gold iscoin is the best currencythats too generalcoin can we at least discuss what currency is the best
And gold is waaaaay more valuable than a coin
A coin is not even better than a dollar, the coin is $0.01 and the dollar is $1.00
The gold is like $72-$170 dollars I mean come one!
The coin is copper which rusts and gold doesn’t rust if it wasn’t rotton
So did you change your opinion?
also i think they mean a dollar is made up of coins
Dollars were first invented in 1792
Amethyst-animation
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Critique - 465 words
Wow… this has to be one of the best poems I’ve read before. I can guarantee that I genuinely felt many emotions whilst reading this – sadness, relief, peace etc. The capitals are also really well used, and I like your use of capitals within this poem, especially Hill and Forest.
A few general things.
Your poem length is great, but it’s okay if it goes a little longer, which is why I’m saying this. At the start you note that the tree “is” magic, the tree is surrounded by magic. This is a compelling image (and as a Fantasy writer who loves using magic in my writing, I approve), but I’d suggest referring back to this more often. Perhaps the tree blooms a flower for the little girl every time she comes to visit, maybe on its branches or on the ground. This could later be used for when the girl comes back, he instinctively blooms the flower again and she picks it, symbolizing that they’re back together.
The girl also goes away to a school. You could give a subtle hint before it happens, not so obvious that a reader would immediately realise “oh she’s coming back, she’s just left for a little”, but something that when she explains she went to school, you realise. Maybe she’s upset when she goes to the tree, but leaves happy. Small things like that, that suggest something is happening away from the Hill, but she enjoys going to the tree.
With that set aside, let’s get into the specifics of this poem <3
I suggest that instead of “hoping”, you say “wishing”, for alliteration. The definition is slightly different but I think it sounds better like that ^^
I’d suggest adding a new line between “she jumps back” and “gasps”, as it fits the rhythm of that verse.
The last comma in the first line is unnecessary, and is a little confusing
Again, I’d suggest adding a new line for rhythm purposes.
For such a pivotal moment in the poem, I’d suggest not using “better than boredom.” Perhaps she says that she’s fine with rude, since she’s so fascinated with a talking tree. Maybe she thinks the rudeness is funny, or she appreciates how honest he is? This also foreshadows to the whole “they sent me away” thing that happens later in the poem.
This is a bit out-of-pocket and out of place, not making sense with what was just said.
I just wanted to say this is a great line <3
Great repetition – definitely keep it.
‘She looks older’ is unnecessary.
The ending is amazing, as well. In summary, this is a great poem – just try to incorporate the things I mentioned at the start of this critique and fix up a few of your punctuation mistakes!
Wow… this has to be one of the best poems I’ve read before. I can guarantee that I genuinely felt many emotions whilst reading this – sadness, relief, peace etc. The capitals are also really well used, and I like your use of capitals within this poem, especially Hill and Forest.
A few general things.
Your poem length is great, but it’s okay if it goes a little longer, which is why I’m saying this. At the start you note that the tree “is” magic, the tree is surrounded by magic. This is a compelling image (and as a Fantasy writer who loves using magic in my writing, I approve), but I’d suggest referring back to this more often. Perhaps the tree blooms a flower for the little girl every time she comes to visit, maybe on its branches or on the ground. This could later be used for when the girl comes back, he instinctively blooms the flower again and she picks it, symbolizing that they’re back together.
The girl also goes away to a school. You could give a subtle hint before it happens, not so obvious that a reader would immediately realise “oh she’s coming back, she’s just left for a little”, but something that when she explains she went to school, you realise. Maybe she’s upset when she goes to the tree, but leaves happy. Small things like that, that suggest something is happening away from the Hill, but she enjoys going to the tree.
With that set aside, let’s get into the specifics of this poem <3
Waiting, watching, hoping, that
Something new will come along.
I suggest that instead of “hoping”, you say “wishing”, for alliteration. The definition is slightly different but I think it sounds better like that ^^
“Careful,”
I rumble.
She jumps back and gasps.
“A talking tree?”
I don’t reply.
I’d suggest adding a new line between “she jumps back” and “gasps”, as it fits the rhythm of that verse.
The little girl, perhaps,
Age ten,
The last comma in the first line is unnecessary, and is a little confusing
I sigh, sending a breeze into the world.
Again, I’d suggest adding a new line for rhythm purposes.
But I think I’ll sit here for now.
Better than boredom.”
For such a pivotal moment in the poem, I’d suggest not using “better than boredom.” Perhaps she says that she’s fine with rude, since she’s so fascinated with a talking tree. Maybe she thinks the rudeness is funny, or she appreciates how honest he is? This also foreshadows to the whole “they sent me away” thing that happens later in the poem.
“You’re too smart for someone your age.”
This is a bit out-of-pocket and out of place, not making sense with what was just said.
“You won’t see the end of me.”
I’ve seen it. All good things end.
I just wanted to say this is a great line <3
I haven't seen the little girl in…
In…
In…
How many years?
Great repetition – definitely keep it.
She looks older.
She doesn’t look like a child anymore.
‘She looks older’ is unnecessary.
The ending is amazing, as well. In summary, this is a great poem – just try to incorporate the things I mentioned at the start of this critique and fix up a few of your punctuation mistakes!
MrMcCoder
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Like turrets? Why not add automatic guns which can defend maybe like a base but so it’s not too op, why not make the zombies destroy it. An extra hard mode which can make the zombies faster and stronger would be cool.
PyraEthan12
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This would work better in Project Ideas, if you want a detailed explanation of the Collaboration forum, go here.
PyraEthan12
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Why not add automatic guns which can defend maybe like a base but so it’s not too op, why not make the zombies destroy it. An extra hard mode which can make the zombies faster and stronger would be cool.
MrMcCoder
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Survival game? You could be stuck on an island and have to traverse it for resources to survive, all whilst fighting off monsters. If you want a challenge, you could implement a rudimentary crafting system.
MrMcCoder
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A space exploration game? It doesn't have to be complex, I made a simple one to show to my Computer Lab class.
PyraEthan12
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This topic doesn’t fit in collaboration, if you want a detailed explanation on the collaboration forum, go here.
Seeing as you’re a new scratcher, maybe this would work better on the New Scratcher’s Forum.
Seeing as you’re a new scratcher, maybe this would work better on the New Scratcher’s Forum.
Peeeeerson
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can you be a kittypet? If can, how. And what stage do you have to be like, kit apprentise, warrior, leader?
MrMcCoder
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Hello! I'm making a zombie survival RPG game and I need some ideas to implement, since it is still a little bit barren. Here's what I've got already:
-Working shop system: a place where you can buy power-ups and weapons
-Gun types: Different guns you can unlock through the shop
-Zombie rewards: Killing certain zombies can give you certain amounts of cash, which you can use to buy stuff from the shop
-Pausing system: You can pause the game if you need to
Here's some stuff I want to add:
-Events: There can be different events that can happen throughout the game, such as Blood Moons (zombie spawn rates and health are increased).
-Minibosses: Occasionally, beefed up zombies can spawn that can give you tons of money when killed
-Weapon Upgrades: Even though the shop is already packed, I want to add a function similar to “Pack-a-Punch” in CoD: Zombies where you can upgrade the guns you have.
-Working shop system: a place where you can buy power-ups and weapons
-Gun types: Different guns you can unlock through the shop
-Zombie rewards: Killing certain zombies can give you certain amounts of cash, which you can use to buy stuff from the shop
-Pausing system: You can pause the game if you need to
Here's some stuff I want to add:
-Events: There can be different events that can happen throughout the game, such as Blood Moons (zombie spawn rates and health are increased).
-Minibosses: Occasionally, beefed up zombies can spawn that can give you tons of money when killed
-Weapon Upgrades: Even though the shop is already packed, I want to add a function similar to “Pack-a-Punch” in CoD: Zombies where you can upgrade the guns you have.
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